The dawn was breaking,so was her sleep.Everything stopped and refused to move.The deafening silence almost killed her and she prayed she could live.She was sweating and panting.She was aghast,fidgety and restless.She thought as if someone was smothering her.She wanted to breathe.She wanted to live.She thanked God, she was alive.Still alive,to die one day.What could have happened???...
She had a nightmare...,a dawn mare probably.Dawn mares,people said,come true...She didn't care.The dawn mares have already happened,sometime in past,thinking of which,she was seething.The memories were fresh,boiling as magma under the earth's crust.Fresh was the SEETHE,taking over her consciousness.She was writhing in pain.PAIN....mental,not physical.What could have happened????????
Nothing much..Just something that could have given anyone an unfortunate death..But she survived..Survived to die one day.....die of seethe.But then what could have happened??? It was in her head..She was disturbed.She was holding too tightly on her so as to asphyxiate herself.Suppresed.Lying in pain all alone.Searching the answers of her questions.Pondering.Fiddling.People were sadistic she thought.Life has betrayed her she thought.She was fragile she thought.Relationships are brittle she thought.She was perceptive,prejudiced..
She was in search of answers of her questions.She found the answers.And as she thought she had the answers,life changed all her questions.Life has betrayed her again.She was again left seething....with new questions.....and new answers...........and old pain..as ever!!!!!
She had a nightmare...,a dawn mare probably.Dawn mares,people said,come true...She didn't care.The dawn mares have already happened,sometime in past,thinking of which,she was seething.The memories were fresh,boiling as magma under the earth's crust.Fresh was the SEETHE,taking over her consciousness.She was writhing in pain.PAIN....mental,not physical.What could have happened????????
Nothing much..Just something that could have given anyone an unfortunate death..But she survived..Survived to die one day.....die of seethe.But then what could have happened??? It was in her head..She was disturbed.She was holding too tightly on her so as to asphyxiate herself.Suppresed.Lying in pain all alone.Searching the answers of her questions.Pondering.Fiddling.People were sadistic she thought.Life has betrayed her she thought.She was fragile she thought.Relationships are brittle she thought.She was perceptive,prejudiced..
She was in search of answers of her questions.She found the answers.And as she thought she had the answers,life changed all her questions.Life has betrayed her again.She was again left seething....with new questions.....and new answers...........and old pain..as ever!!!!!
Interesting post...and the emotions are expressed in quite an effective manner..and I think that its more of a poem than a story at some places.
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You're writing style intrigues me very much.
ReplyDeletei like how you stress and use repetition
Unusual but fascinating analogy.
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i liked the way u brought to life d anguish n d helplessness of the gal...i could almost feel it! kp d fire in u burning..kp seething :):P
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u describe feelings in words pretty well!commendable job!keep it up :)
ReplyDeleteA nice post... liked it!!
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